Err... you wowed me so much I started speaking French.
You are absolutely incredible. I'm physiologically addicted to your writing.
I loved the way you described the light, and how it would look in Illya's hair. Beautiful. Beautiful. And the habits of Napolean worked so well in the church, just adding to the beauty of the scene. The way his childhood habits played into his attraction, how that old solace from all the pain becomes something new, building off the old, the conjunction of past and present so powerful that he can't deal with it.
Oh, simply astounding.
*worships you*
I do have one criticism, though. It's a highly subjective one, so feel free to disregard it. It's just that I didn't particularly like the line "He looked like something surreal and lovely," for the image didn't seem to fit with the concrete nature of all the imagery beforehand. At least to me.
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Date: 2003-07-01 05:36 pm (UTC)*wipes sweat from brow*
Tu es vraiment fantastique!
Err... you wowed me so much I started speaking French.
You are absolutely incredible. I'm physiologically addicted to your writing.
I loved the way you described the light, and how it would look in Illya's hair. Beautiful. Beautiful. And the habits of Napolean worked so well in the church, just adding to the beauty of the scene. The way his childhood habits played into his attraction, how that old solace from all the pain becomes something new, building off the old, the conjunction of past and present so powerful that he can't deal with it.
Oh, simply astounding.
*worships you*
I do have one criticism, though. It's a highly subjective one, so feel free to disregard it. It's just that I didn't particularly like the line "He looked like something surreal and lovely," for the image didn't seem to fit with the concrete nature of all the imagery beforehand. At least to me.