I really liked the intimate scene at the beginning, but I loved the breakfast table part. Remus post-coitally perky, Sirius sore and somewhat grumpy- very realistic. Also liked how the subject of Harry came up. It all felt very natural, and flowed easily.

But now I think we've turned up the true mystery of this story - why did the cowboy leave his lady? I guess we'll never find out, what with this Remus/Sirius subplot you're distracted with. ;)