ext_63579 ([identity profile] susan-peri.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] keelywolfe 2006-01-18 07:29 pm (UTC)

I love the tone of this, the shorter sentences, and I like how you used an outside POV to give us Sirius's mind. That's not easy to do. It's building nicely and I can't wait to see the rest.
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